牛津雅思模拟试题exams_ielts_mc_pt_writea2

Task 2 Sample Answer

Task 2

Commentary

Task Response

The writer responds to the task appropriately, and generally remains focused on the question to be addressed. Benefits and disadvantages are considered, and the writer finally adopts a position, as required.

Despite the overall relevance of this answer, some improvements could be

achieved. The first paragraph approaches the topic rather indirectly, and lacks a clearly defined focus, which weakens the impact of the introduction. Some of its content is, perhaps, not strictly relevant. The final paragraph suffers from the

same problem, though to a slightly lesser extent. The crux of the piece, the writer’s own conclusion, is in the middle of the paragraph ( …I am deeply convinced that …), rather than being positioned prominently. Perhaps the writing would benefit from adopting a more assertive tone.

At 411 words the piece is over the length required.

Coherence and Cohesion

This writer uses her linguistic knowledge to the full to guide the reader successfully through the answer.

The organisation of information is commendably clear and progresses from

introduction, through benefits and disadvantages, to conclusion. Appropriate paragraphing supports this structure.

Pronouns and articles are generally used to good effect to signal relationships within and between sentences, and paragraphs are linked with a well-chosen

linking device.

Lexical Resource

A wide range of lexis is used, with a high degree of accuracy. The writer shows

knowledge of idiomatic phrasing, such as The other,equally important aspect is ….

Occasionally it is evident that the writer has some limitations, for example

supporters … often bring out the fact that …or To put things together ....However, in these cases the writer successfully paraphrases, and these infrequent lapses

barely affect the reader’s progress. Spelling is almost flawless.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

The writer’s command of grammar, as with lexis, conveys the impression of

fluency. A wide range of structures is attempted, with a good degree of accuracy.

For example, The first good thing about tests or exams is that they do check the level of…,is a difficult structure used perfectly accurately here. Occasionally there are errors with complex structures, such as … some students might feel discouraged by the same fact that makes the others motivated…,but there is no interference with comprehension whatsoever. Simpler and more frequent structures rarely exhibit errors, and punctuation is practically error-free.

Marks

This answer would probably receive a Band 7or Band 8.